Be the best cloud you can be!
http://www.andrew.cmu.edu/user/lschenke/CloudStory.html
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Playing Stories – Fall 2012 – 6424
Playing Stories – Fall 2012 – 6424
Be the best cloud you can be!
http://www.andrew.cmu.edu/user/lschenke/CloudStory.html
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The simple and cute-sie writing characterizes the cloud and makes reading it hilarious. It was entertaining, and found it enjoyable. With its simplicity, it lacks depth, but I don’t know if i’m missing it. You could have accompanied it with simple images or changed the color/aesthetic of the site to match the story.
Cute game, and I enjoyed the humor – but I feel like you could have expanded the story a bit more. I think some images might have helped flesh out the character of the cloud a bit. Additionally, while you did give the player a fair number of choices and there were several paths the cloud could take, I was left feeling like the game was still lacking something at the end.
It’s hurried, in a surprisingly transparent way. It sounds like the narrator himself has better things to do than telling you a story “Alright let’s get this storm assignment out of the way. Done, good job.”
I like the language you used – it was cute. I agree with the above statements, however. It seemed to lack any meaningful content – in the sense that it doesn’t engage the reader. Visuals would have been nice. There were parts in the story where I had a difficult time imagining the scenery so either more detail in the language or explicit visuals in those places would have been a great touch.
This is pretty cute, but I think a little predictable? It would have been nice to create some goal in the story because as a player I’m not really sure what the purpose of going through the story is, but I can appreciate that maybe that’s the type of personality you associate with a cloud–it just wanders around going with the flow.
I agree that the writing was cute and energetic. I didn’t find too much in the story beyond what you might expect from a cloud – some more unexpected things hidden in the plot might have given the reader more incentive to read on.